Streets of Arrakeen - poem

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Leto Atreides II
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Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Postby Leto Atreides II » 10 Feb 2019 12:50

I recently published a book of poetry: https://www.amazon.com/gp/product/1793111065

Including this work, which I wrote in the spirit of a song, rather than a poem:

Smells of spice and sand
Crysknife near my hand
Stillsuit encompasses my form
Traversing the abode of the worm

The unwary are liable to get hurt
Like a little melon at the edge of the desert
Defenseless against rapacious slaughter
Batigh, I'll take your water

Strike before I'm seen
In the streets of Arrakeen

Born in the shadow of Shuloch
To a people of whom few talk
Raised on anger and hate
For fools for whom we lay in wait

Or hunt where they convene
In the streets of Arrakeen

Strike before I'm seen
In the streets of Arrakeen
Only fools prefer the past!

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Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Postby Freakzilla » 11 Feb 2019 08:05

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Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Postby georgiedenbro » 11 Feb 2019 12:05

The "I'll take your water" line is welcome here in Jacurutu sietch.
"um-m-m-ah-h-h-hm-m-m-m!"

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Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Postby Serkanner » 11 Feb 2019 13:50

Very nice! :clap:
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Re: Streets of Arrakeen - poem

Postby Naib » 13 Feb 2019 11:02

:clap:
We need more like this.