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    Where Others Have Gone: Revenant

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    Where Others Have Gone: Revenant

    Postby SandRider » 21 Oct 2010 11:33

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    Re: Where Others Have Gone: Revenant

    Postby Naïve mind » 26 Aug 2012 08:34

    I felt a little bit disappointed by this one. The writer had lots of interesting narrative ideas, but ultimately, the story could've used two or three more rounds of editing, to fix the spelling and grammar issues, and eventually, the story loses steam.
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    Re: Where Others Have Gone: Revenant

    Postby VictorBarowski » 20 Sep 2013 23:38

    This is pretty well done, in terms of both prose style and story ideas. It needs a good editorial pass and a few more drafts to refine the ending, but it's a terrific work in progress. Solid B+.
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