I loved the bus full of tourists and the littered campsite myself; that or camping outside in flimsy tents after a static storm where they had to stay in the armored trakmaster.
Yeah"poignant" story my ass...
Did you mean Tosser? wrote:We felt the exploration and adventure was a poignant story that demonstrated the challenges of life on the planet
Hellhole. Their tragic fate highlighted very real dangers of this place and served as an
object lesson to other colonists who chosd not to abide by the General’s wise rules...Besides, not knowing what really
happened to the Children of Amadin enhances the mystery.
Here's what I noticed, Kevin.-No description of their religion, at all.
They wear uniforms and prey and follow the Leader. A real creative mind would come up with at least something, one thing, ANYTHING, to describe their actual beliefs, even if its such a minor point about characters who die and their entire purpose is to die. Oh, okay there is one line of scripture "Listen 100 times before you speak." Yeah how about this Kevin, Read Dune More Than Once Before You Attempt to Write it. Heck, try this on: TURN OFF THE DVD PLAYER WHEN YOU 'EDIT'.
-Hellhole didn't kill them. Beetles didn't kill them. YOU killed them, by writing characters so amazingly idiotic that they willing drive into hell.
"Close by, the other vehicles skidded, collision-‐‑avoidance sensors keeping them from crashing into each other
-So....not the drivers then.
"The seismic upheaval knocked some of the lava boulders that had been piled up in incomprehensible defensive formations.
-what? no, seriously, WHAT?
"A quake . . . a Hellquake.
? Can't decide. Both.
"With well-‐‑practiced efficiency, the Children of Amadin erected prefab structures, sleep shelters, and communal awnings.
-next to the lava flows, right after the (man I can't even type it) quake. One of the vehicles was disabled during the...quake so they figure they should stop here before it gets worse.
"What had that inhuman race been like? Had they seen their end coming? What sort of
messages, or warnings, might they have left behind?
Most importantly, had they believed in Amadin?
Yeah I'm gonna guess its no. And if it was yes, Amadin did a shit job of taking care of them, so you might want to rethink your faith.