...almost any sentence in those books could be used as an example of shoddy writing.
The Hacks Twain in Sandworms of Dune referring to the Butlerian Jihad wrote:They had unleashed countless atomic weapons that not only destroyed the thinking machines, but also trillions of human beings who had been held in slavery.
It works. It seems like they're constantly using hyperbole to impress the gravity of every situation. Unleashing countless atomic weapons doesn't really seem like something that would even be possible. A better use would be to say that these two unleash countless examples of how shitty their writing is.
I've got to try this again...
In House Corrino page 201 wrote:Billions upon billions are already dead, rotting out under numerous suns. Did you expect the machines just to sit back and let the Scourge take its course, without having a second phase of their plan ready?
Well, why the fuck not? They're machines! They can wait forever. I hate these stupid books.
Now I'm just getting pissy. Anyone else want to give it a shot. They have to be chosen at random, no preplanned selections of their writing.